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Post by cross on Sept 1, 2007 22:05:16 GMT -5
Clan Name:Hokkaido
Place of Origin: Kirigakure
Current location: Kirigakure
Name of kekkei genkai (bloodline limit):True Sight
Description of kekkei genkai:The Kekkei Genkai only has one stage but the stage gives all the abilitys needed. The first ability is the power to see chakra from up to 30 meters infront of them, the secound ability allows the user to sense objects within 5 meters around them(16ft). The secound ability works by a chakra that is slightly leaked out and connects to the outline of objects allowing the user to sense them. Once out of the distance of 5 meters(16ft) the chakra will leave the object staying with the host. This ability only effects objects that don't already have a chakra.
Due to a weird effect Kazuko can see up to 800 meters away this may be caused by his blindness increasing the range of his chakra vision because he is not distracted by objects but it is currently unknown.
History: The clan was very minor when starting out and no one even knew of them for over 200 years besides the mist village. Once Kazuka was born into the clan and he grew up the clan became known and feared into spys found none of them possesed the type of abilitys that Kazuko had. The clan though weak has a vast amount of infomation on all other bloodlines, villages, ninja and much more.
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Post by Yoko on Sept 2, 2007 17:54:45 GMT -5
I am sorry man but the stages are too much like the Byakugan...I can't approve it. I know it will probably mess up your entire character, but it is like an exact copy of the Byakugan which is Konoha village only.
The only thing different is the fact that they do not use the Jyuuken style of fighting...or Gentle Fist. It would be fine if he could see the chakra around him that is fine since it is not seeing the chakra network, but the 360 degree vision is just too much like Hyuuga.
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Post by cross on Sept 2, 2007 18:10:45 GMT -5
Ok, I didn't make it clear I am sorry. He cannot see 360degrees unless it is a object without chakra which he will sense it such as a kunai. He won't see someone with chakra though. He also doesn't see chakra network he see's pure chakra he cannot see the points. Also unlike hyuuga(hyuga) he cannot see objects from afar he can only see chakra, he has to be within the distance stated of 35 meters to see objects such as tree's,kunai,swords, any other object that doesn't have a real chakra to it.
Also in the first sentence i stated "inner chakra of others but not the chakra network"
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Post by Yoko on Sept 2, 2007 18:20:26 GMT -5
"It would be fine if he could see the chakra around him that is fine since it is not seeing the chakra network" <---part of the sentence above so that makes it easier for you to see that I made no mention that he could see the chakra network, and agreeing with you that he indeed could not.
Back to the thing at hand. His kekkei genkai is to see chakra, so why is it that he seeing something behind him WITHOUT chakra? If it was another shinobi I might understand, but an object without chakra and him seeing it hardly makes much sense to me.
As for the 360 thing in general, I think you should just take that out and make it easier on us both. I can pretty much approve this clan if the 360 thing is taken out, because that is the one aspect of a Byakugan I do not want to see copied...seeing chakra in general is fine, but seeing in 360 is kinda too much. I do not want to push this clan down because I made a Hyuuga myself, I am merely saying that it seems too much like the Byakugan. If you want this choice to be overturned, ask an admin to look at this because they over rule me =P, it just seems too much like Byakugan to me.
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Post by cross on Sept 2, 2007 18:43:48 GMT -5
I changed it a bit
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Post by Yoko on Sept 2, 2007 19:12:00 GMT -5
The only thing I can see now that is a problem is the starting effects...tone down the 800 meters thing for people who would wanna join this clan. I can understand YOUR character having that ability, but anyone else I wanna say that they don't see that far
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Post by cross on Sept 2, 2007 20:27:51 GMT -5
Changed.
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Post by Yoko on Sept 2, 2007 20:46:12 GMT -5
lower please...like 40 for people who activate it, because even Neji who was a clan prodigy was able to only see 50 meters with his byakugan
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Post by cross on Sept 3, 2007 23:25:54 GMT -5
I changed it than
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Post by Yoko on Sept 4, 2007 18:40:24 GMT -5
sorry about that
ok, this looks good, approved
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