Senzp's jutsu

[Senzo]

Name:
Poison Claws (Toxic Flower Claw)

Element:
Unkown

Type:
Ninjutsu

Rank:
A

Description:
There claws release deadly acidic poison which can melt flesh and virtually anything else very quickly. Sometimes he uses it like InuYasha uses his Exorcising Claws of Steel (Iron Reaver, Soul Stealer) attack in the form of large blades of energy, but he can also use it in the form of a green attack that looks like he’s spraying acid.


Name:
Whip of Light (Energy Whip)

Element:
unknown

Type:
Ninjutsu

Rank:
A

Description:
They can generate a thin, whip like strand of yellow energy from his fingertips that can slice through almost anything. The whip also displays characteristics of poison akin to the burning effect it has on contact, possibly an extension of his claw attack.

[Haihei]

Okay.

First off, don't space them out like that. It makes it hard to tell where teh Jutsu starts and ends. Just keep the information per jutsu right with it's other info, and space in between the jutsus themselves. Make sense?

Now for the jutsus themselves.

For both of these, if there is no specific element, just label it as "None". That is an easy fix. Also, for both of these your wording doesn't make much sense. You say things like "they" and "There" but I don't know what your referring to.

Poison Claws: This one seems a little freakishly strong. Being able to melt flesh I understand a little more than "virtually anything else" That would imply you could melt your way through anthing, it's a basically unstoppable technique. You either really need to tone that down, or take it out.

I will allow you to keep the melting flesh. However it needs to take a little while, otherwise you could melt people before they even knew what hit them. I will also allow you to keep the ability to spray the acid.

Light Whip: Where does this yellow energy come from? He can't just magically materialize an energy that can saw through anything. Attacks that can do that, are just too powerful. There has to be SOMETHING that can stop it. If it was an extension of the poison claw technique, then why not just say that? Just make the whip out of the acid instead of a random yellow energy. However, if you don't want it to be made of the acid, it sounds like your next best bet would be to have it be a simple whip made form condensed chakra.

Any questions, feel free to ask.